Title: Scenes from an Airplane 1
Subtext: At first sight.
Author:
Date: 29 Apr 15 (Wednesday in the AM)
Copyright:
Time: Less than a minute
Replies: 5
Revisions: 13
Publicity: Superfeed
Downfeed:

None but those who have experienced it can form an idea of the delicious throng of sensations which rush into an American’s bosom when he first comes in sight of Europe.

“Prepare the cabin for landing.”

She pressed her forehead hard against the window, staring into an alluring darkness between breaks in the clouds below. With a short inhale that dilated her eyes and instantaneously expanded her vision of the world, of her life, she gasped. A rooftop. And then another, and another, and then whole bunches of them adjoined together more neatly than she’d ever imagined.

Small cars and trucks buzzed about hairpin turns, around dark green gardens. It had been going on all along. Holland. Europe. The World. But in her, something had just begun.

Revisions

Horse » Authorship
Elk » 10:45 AM 01 May 15
Elk » 10:25 AM 29 Apr 15

The Thread (5)

 Author's voice in grey. 

  1. Nice work capturing the essence of this initial exposure — it’s accurate and universal. The rooftop stuff is golden.

  2. I’d drop “together” from “adjoined together”. It’s a redundancy, and it breaks the flow of that sentence.

  3. Europe plays an essential part in the founding mythology of the United States. It is a fractured and fracturing mythology, fabricated as much as if not more so than it is simple truth, and yet here I am, identifying in full with the emotion. Although to be fair, I feel similarly touching down at any foreign airport, not just the first but every time, though it’s true it’s in a different way from Europe. All this knowing full well that my perceptions are clouded and disturbed by my own projections. Funny things happen on airplanes.

  4. @elk — I hear you about “together”.

    @rabbit — As mountainous, oceanic, pristine and lush as Europe can look, and as urban, bustling, industrious and efficient as America can look, when I fly into Europe, I’m looking at and for cities, and when I fly into the States, it’s land and geography that make me gaze. There’s still a feeling of society in one direction and one of the wild in the other. Are the myths so strong, like lenses we can’t take off, or are they in the things themselves?

  5. Good point about city/country. I think it’s both a lens and a fact. Europe represents society, and America represents that old fashioned rugged individualism.

    @horse — Can we get attributions for the quotes in your last two pieces?

New Reply


Rooster Land
Verses & Vignettes &c.

Encapsulation

Rooster Land is a property of Collate LLC. It has been 1845 days since we began.

Nota Bene

"Writing is a little door. Some fantasies, like big pieces of furniture, won't come through." – Susan Sontag